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Kelsey Lynn Reed

"A Simple Fantasy" by Kelsey Lynn Reed

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This is a rather sad story. I don't know what inspired me to write it, maybe I was not feeling myself that day. I notice that some people want me to expand on it but I think I'm just going to leave it unless I suddenly have this really awesome idea for it. Sometimes short stories just have to remain short stories. Besides, I have waaay too many long stories anyways.


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I’ve been born to a world that I do not belong in. There is but one person I truly trust anymore, only one place I know I’m safe at. Everyone but my friend has betrayed or forgotten me. I now live deep in a forest no one bothers to go in. It’s a wonderful place, far away from any other humans. My friend lives with me in a house he built. It’s a tree house made out of beautiful wood and is warm and comfortable, even in the darkest times. But forgive me, I have not said anything about myself that is useful.

            My name is not important now but I will tell you other things. I am a young girl lost in a world I wish I didn’t know. People have lost all virtues: loyalty, trust, respect, love, justice, honor. Men fight with guns. They shoot people before the victim has a chance to defend themselves. Women no longer choose a man to marry for life but skip from partner to partner with no shame at all. People no longer stop to admire the beauty that surrounds them. They don’t bother to gaze at the lush green valleys, the ice-cold mountain streams, or the clouds that roll over the horizon, ready to pour out their souls to give life to the land below. People no longer admire anything but themselves.

            None of this was so in my world. Men fought in duels and wars, shield and sword their only protection. Women married once and only once. We didn’t destroy nature like people do now. Instead everyone respected the land they lived off of and cared for it. When the rain came after a long drought we would all run outside and stand in the downpour, thanking the heavens for taking pity on us.

            I am young and I still remember all of this, although I cannot explain how. I remember looking at the wild beauty of the world without seeing airplanes in the sky, cars speeding on roads, or any other thing that should never have been created.

            But now I am babbling. I write this to preserve a world in writing that has been forgotten everywhere else. It is my world, the world I loved and will never see again. Although I am lost, I am not alone in this strange world. My friend stands beside me, solid like an oak tree. He will never abandon me, he still remembers and longs for the old ways too. He knows what true love is and he knows the meaning of honor and loyalty. He is the one who encouraged me to write about our world. I ask you to join me as I tell you a tale from long ago.     

 

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            If you stood outside the city walls of Taminee, you could look out over the huge green meadows and see for miles. Past the meadows, ancient forests spread away, stretching their reaches as far as possible, up into the gray and rocky snow-topped mountains that surround the valley Taminee stood tall and proud in. On a rainy day, if you were lucky, the thunder would roll but the clouds would part, letting streams of sunlight fly down to coat everything in a golden light. The sight would bring a sense of power so huge that it was hard to grasp the concept. Everyone who lived in Taminee knew how lucky they were and were thankful for it.

            The city itself was clean and tidy. Hardly any crime was committed and the small government that held the city together was truthful and commanded justice. None of its citizens were amazingly rich but no one could be found begging on the streets. Everyone helped support the city and no one took more than their share. Now that I look back at this wonderful time it amazes me how perfect life was. Festivals were held every season. We gave thanks for what had been given to us by nature and praised what was to come.

            This lasted for more years than I can remember, but it did not last forever.

            During the last winter Taminee would know, a fog took over the mountains around us. It was not true fog. It was living, it was destructive. Humans took shape from the fog as they took over our beautiful forests, leaving only a desolate wasteland behind.

            Our city had no army; there was no need for one. We had no protection from the Army of the Mist. They came, all too-human, and left Taminee and its citizens in ruin. Only two of us got away; my friend and I. We watched our beloved city go up in flames. Anger and hatred shone in the eyes of the soldiers from the Army of Mist. We did not understand. My friend and I could only watch as our lives were ruined by people we never knew existed.

            Centuries have passed now. For some reason we have lived on in immortal silence, remaining in the mountains that are now desolate and lifeless. We watched as the once peaceful valley was modernized, secretly hoping that one day ruin will come upon these new and foreign people, just as it did to us. We wait for Taminee to return but we know it is in vain. But still we wait. Forever we will hope and watch the world change before our eyes. 

 

←- Alone- Chapter 1 | Chance - The Intervener -→

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3 Jan 2008:-) Crystel J. Redknap
Wow!!!! that was so nicely done....all I can say is wow!

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Thank you! ^_^ -happy dance- I wasn’t sure what kind of response I would get on this one and I’m really surprised I even have comments already since it’s only been up for one day...yay!"
4 Jan 2008:-) Angela Nordahl
What can I say? It’s wonderful! But it is you, so of course it is! Plus, I already knew it would be, since I got to read the rough draft. (Ah, the benefits of being the author’s friend XD)

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "thanks ^_^ -ahem- put more stuff in your library o_o"
4 Jan 2008:-) Kelsey M. Graham
so Taminee was like an urban-ish Eden, sort of? I agree w/ Emma McDonald about the rain. I love rain...

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Ya, it’s like the perfect place to be...I like rain too 10"
26 Mar 2008:-) Désirée Dippenaar
This is really really good! So sad... but the emotion comes across very well, in the narrative tone and everything. Great descriptions, too! A longer version of this really would be nice and interesting~

Liked this a lot!! ^^

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "-bounces- thank you! ^_^ Glad you liked it! I’ll probably make a longer version one day since people seem to like it enough...again, thanks!!!"
25 Apr 200845 Kyree
Wow Kelsey. You did such a wonderful job with this story. You put alot of detail and it made me feel like I was in Taminee. I could see Taminee standing before me. I also have to agree with David in saying that it sounds like a prologue. Maybe one day, a novel will be in the works. Fantastic story.

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Thanks ^_^ I’m probably going to add on to it eventually but that time is indefinite right now. I decided to start a totally different story and I’m taking a break from the rest while I work on it...don’t wanna get bored of my writing xD"
2 Jul 2008:-) Meaghan M. Jendrysik
That was very well written. It is very sad how quickle good things come to an end, and how there are still those who remember it.

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Why thank you! Glad you like it ^_^"
17 Jul 2008:-) Gwenivere Stephan
Very nicely done. The idea is good and I think you pulled it off pretty well. The beginning and end could use a little work, I think. When she isn’t describing the city is drags a little. But this is nice, anyway. That sounds like such a nice place. Also, I like that they want ruin to come to the people that took their city away but don’t do anything about it. Interesting story, nicely written, good job!

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Glad you enjoyed ^_^ I’ve been told the beginning needs a bit of work by a few people which I’ll have to do someday xD Thanks again!"
25 Jul 2008:-) Nicoline Badenhorst
I agree, the beginning is a bit abstract... I realise the whole charm of this is that it is written in the voice of the girl, and this is probably written a lifetime after it happens, but maybe it would help to make it more vivid -going only one or two steps towards an action-based story might help- but you should keep the focus on the emotions; I like that very much.

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "thanks for the suggestions ^_^ I’ll have to look into this sometime soon...glad you enjoyed!"
31 Mar 2009:-) Nikki van de Pol
Very nice story. I’m amazed at how much you manage to tell in just so few lines. You also have truly a talent for description and creating vivid images, so that as a reader you can picture in your mind easily what you’re reading. Also, I can really relate to some of the feelings you’re taking up in your story,I think they’re very easily applyable to our world as well, sadly enough... But great job, keep up the lovely work 2

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "thanks ^_^ will come by your page soon! sorry this is so late... for some reason I was never informed about your comment o_O"
12 Jun 200945 Tara
It’s a beautiful peice of work. You’ve managed to articulate the feelings that frequent the lives of many.

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Thank you ^_^"
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About 'A Simple Fantasy':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Kelsey Lynn Reed
 • Copyright: ©Kelsey Lynn Reed. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Journal entry, Dark fantasy, Sad, Guardian
 • Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles, Romance, Emotion, Love, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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