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Kelsey Lynn Reed

"Demon Fire |Prologue|" by Kelsey Lynn Reed

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This is a short story that has been whirling around in my head for awhile now and I've finally written it. I'm not much of a short story person so bear with me. It's destructive and short and I like it. Due to some curious people I have taken it upon myself to write a longer version of this...

I am currently halfway through the longer version of Demon Fire so hopefully once I get it published some questions will be answered. Enjoy!


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She watched the flames stretch towards the sky, listened to the demon screaming in fury and exaltation.

I told them, she thought. No one believes Witches anymore. We're just a thing of the past they say. Simple fairy tales to scare children. Well the fairies are laughing at the idiots now and so am I.

Screaming people, men, woman, and children, fled from the toxic smoke that was descending on the city. Blazing embers exploded from the burning buildings, picking and choosing their targets at their own will. The black sky glowed a bloody red-orange color and she watched the sparks fly up to the heavens. She, herself, sat on top of a building far away, out of reach of the demon's clutches. She sneered down at the humans that ran through the streets below her. She had no pity for such stupid creatures. In her mind they deserved to die. She had warned them of the demon. She had sensed it weeks before it arrived from the darkest depths of the earth's core. She told them all of the death and destruction it would wreak if they didn't leave the city immediately. But no. They were selfish and refused to believe their lives could be destroyed in only seconds.

She had been there when the demon emerged from hiding. She had watched it crawl through the building, nothing human about it. The fiery depths of it's eyes had looked at her, had understood she would not let it kill her. Most of all, it had seen her as a friend that shouldn't be killed. The demon didn't have any real form. It's shape flickered between many types of animals, beings, and mythological creatures. The entire body was slightly transparent, enough so that she could see the burning embers inside of it waiting to escape.

The demon had struck with massive force not known to the humans of earth. The explosion took a quarter of the city within seconds, the aftershock crushing buildings and shattering all glass.

'Demons are to be taken seriously,' she had warned the people. 'They aren't like they appear to be in your childish stories. They don't look human and they don't act human. None of you could stand to live through the destruction it will unleash on your city.'

She had told them hundreds of times. Someone screamed on the street below her. When she looked down she realized how close the blaze was getting. A wicked grin spread over her face as the fire began creeping up the building she was standing on. She could see the flames leaping up with a life of their own. They twisted and curled into shapes, words from ancient languages, and images she couldn't comprehend. The energy from the fire and devastation lent her the power to help the demon in it's mission to destroy the city. She forced the wind to blow harder and harder until a massive tornado emerged from the flames. It was all fire and debris, the heat catching everything on fire within a mile. She escalated strength of the tornado, making it spin faster and faster.

White noise, something you can hear but is so loud and overwhelming that you stop hearing any noise at all, echoed through the city. The quiet lasted only a moment. Then the tornado reached the center of the city where the demon waited. The demon cried out as it greeted it's friend, it's power and strength. Pressure built and everyone left in the city screamed in fear, amazement, and insanity.

The last explosion was always the best. There was no fire, no debris flying through the air. It was sound and light. A huge sound wave ripped the city to shreds, leaving nothing and no one alive. Then the white light blinded her, making it impossible to see what had happened.

It was over. The city and people were gone. All that was left was the ruins of a once-beautiful city. She surveyed the devastation, content knowing she was finally alone. She had never liked humans but she hadn't wished for such a thing to happen to so many of them at once. That was why she had warned them, why she had tried to tell the woman and children to flee for their lives. But they hadn't. Now they were all dead, probably never to be found or identified in such chaos that was to come when others discovered what had happened.

She jumped off the only building that still stood tall. Landing gently on her feet she began her journey. Perhaps the next city would listen to her when she told them they didn't have much time.

The grey light of dawn was just beginning to illuminate the still-burning city as she stepped passed the city limits and into the dark forest that no one ever entered. It was guarded by the creatures of the night, myth, and fairy tale. Until the next demon emerged she would stay there, waiting for another day to come when maybe, just maybe, she would be trusted enough to help someone survive the attack of a demon.

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16 Jul 2008:-) Richard legend laws
Hi. I liked your deamon.. the way he (she?) kept on flickering in form. In my head, the whole thing had a japaneese manga feel to it... the explosions, the screaming... peoples heads popping off (that bit only happened in my brain, when the final bang happened). As for the witch, she aint no heroine, but she aint no baddy either.

I liked the ending. Gwenivere is right when she says that it makes you think this event is part of an ongoing saga, that this sort of thing has happened before and will happen again. The sad thing is though is that if she remains a recluse from the people she is trying to save, when she delivers her warning they probably won’t belive her! It is as if she is cursed to a fruitless crusade while the deamons mock her efforts.
Poor Gal!
xxx
Richard

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Glad you enjoyed it! I’m not sure I could write an ongoing saga that followed this girl to tell the truth. Demons and Witches have never really been my strong point. I’m also currently engrossed in a couple other longer stories I’ve been working on. Perhaps when I finish I will consider trying something new like this ^_^ I see your point about the reclusiveness and what you say makes perfect sense. I shall consider these words of wisdom -walks off, pondering about new story lines-"
17 Jul 2008:-) Anna Dolgopolova
Hi! I love this little story! I love the power of the demon and the security that the Witch has because (i think) she is like the demon in some ways, therefore similiar; a friend. Very well written and I also like that you aren’t one of those saps that squeezes a happy ending out of a none too happy story just so people wont commit suicide in the night. I for one, would be flattered if someone commited suicide over my writing, but now im just drifting. Thank you for the wonderful entertainment and well done on the mods choice!

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "As I stated somewhere above, I think my character has a love/hate relationship with the demon but I truly don’t know yet xD I most definitely agree about being flattered with the suicide although I would feel a bit guilty. Then again, who am I to be guilty? I just killed an entire population off -evil grin- Sappy endings can go hide in a closet where they can’t get out and bother me. It would be kinda strange to have her walk off into the woods into the arms of someone and kiss him good night, don’t you think? I do...Anyways, glad you enjoyed! ^_^"
17 Jul 2008:-) David Christopher Meredith
I’ll secod the idea that it sounds like an excert from a loger peace. This could be a quite interesting novel if your witch character was handled the right kinds of way, maybe a sort of self righteous anti-hero kind of way... In ay case it peaked my interest enough that I would be willing to take a look at the rest of the story if you were to continue it.

If you get time I hope that you would check out my stuff too. If you like demons in particular I hope you’ll take a look at...

http://www.elfwood.com/libr/d/m/dmeredith/demon_house.htm.htm- - l

Good job!

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "I’ll definitely swing by and read your stuff ^_^ I warn you though, I have over 100 stories I’m still catching up on so it might be a week or two but eventually I will come! I promise! I believe somewhere above I was considering a longer version and I just might have to do something I don’t know how to do...write a longer version about a witch and a demon...yay for learning experiences! xD"
17 Jul 2008:-) Kelsey M. Graham
*is kicking herself for not noticing this story till now* Yay! Kelsey got a mod’s star!!!!!! *confetti*
Splosions! Double yay!! *happyhappyjoyjoy* (Lupus: ’hehehehe and it goes BOOM! heehee’ *rocking back and forth happily*)

’The black sky glowed a bloody red-oraange color and she watched the sparks fly up to the heavens.’


:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "yeesh, tell me how you really feel xD Ah yes, my wonderful mistake finder, thank you for pointing that out. I’m amazed there wasn’t more =O Is Lupus feeling ok today? sounds crazier than usual...thanks! ^_^"
17 Jul 2008:-) Kharmii
Ooo...definitely not the destructive type! I know it’s a fantasy story, but sometimes stories can reflect the darkness a person has inside, and this comes across as a misanthropic, nihilistic piece. Your optimism is no comfort. That would be like saying, "My whole family died in a car wreck, but at least some new people could move into their house without having to worry about them making them leave!" The mods are always picking things like this to highlight. It seems like the fairy tale world isn’t as innocent as it used to be...

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "I think everyone had a bit of a dark side, even you but it’s hidden by the nifty dancing fairies! Misanthropic and nihilistic huh? Yeah that sounds about right and I’m sure quite a few people would agree with you! I have a really dark and slightly twisted sense of humor at times xD Try to give the mods a break, they work hard. Besides, it’s not all the mods that choose, only one mod can nominate a piece for the choice so it’s more like personal preference I think...anyways, i’ll try and write something happy and kool sometime if that would make you happier ^_^"
18 Jul 2008:-) Angela Nordahl
Hi! So... I love it! It’s nice to see the darker side of your personality come out in your writing once in a while. As a dark fantasy fan I must say you deserve the mod star. (And as best friend I say: YAY FOR YOU!!!) XD (Stabs a few more humans to finish off the job).

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "thanks ^_^"
30 Jul 2008:-) Diana N Carter
Very nice story!! Well, not "nice" persay, but definitely well done and interesting. I loved the description of the demon. (kind of reminded me of the balrog in the LOTR movies perhaps?)

A couple suggestions for next time (even though it was overall fantastic). This sentence sounded a little bit childish "The last explosion was always the best". "Always the best" reminded me of a small child describing his mother’s chocolate chip cookies, lol. Perhaps there is just another way of wording it.

And this sentence I found confusing "something you can hear but is so loud and overwhelming that you stop hearing any noise at all". I know exactly what you mean, but it took a few read throughs to get it. I think just moving some of the words around and finding a way to take out the word "but" might clear it up.

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Aw, you didn’t like that part? It’s true you know, the last explosion is always the best 12 I’ll see what I can do about the sentence about the white noise sometime but for now it shall stay that way because I have other things to do...Thanks for the suggestions ^_^"
11 Aug 2008:-) Nicoline Badenhorst
I’ll swing by for a more detailed comment once I’ve digested this. I’ve got a fascination with the dark, so I can understand the witch, but why was she actively helping the demon?

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Well, I guess it’s kinda like "I warned the people, they don’t believe me, they’re all gonna die anyways, so why not help the demon make the explosion look kool?" 1"
4 Nov 2008:-) Brad A. Dawson
I loved this story! For starters I can certainly appreciate the reality of it--one can’t expect a happy ending EVERY time. I think cheesy, happy endings are an unecessary and obligatory fixture of fantasy stories and I love how you didn’t attempt to gloss over the unfolding events in this story with some saccharine sentiment that would add needless cheer to the end. I love how the heroine seems conflicted in her righteous anger at being spurned and her longing to have had her warning taken seriously, thus saving lives. I also loved how you conceptualised the demon, very nice, very nice indeed! 1

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Yay! Glad you enjoyed it ^_^ I believe happy endings have a place in stories but they have to be placed well or else they totally throw off the entire "vibe" of the story itself. "
3 Feb 2009:-) Charlotte Simons
hiii
i have a question about teh story (its very good and a well deserved mods choice :] )
if the witch dislikes humans so much, why does she continue on and try to save them?
is it a punishment of the gods for something she did in teh past?
or is it something like a curse that she was born with... being connected to the demon and condemned by her mother/father/power figure(?) to help others who are not like her?

:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed replies: "Why thank you ^_^
The answer to your question is that as a child she was cursed with the power to understand a demon and partially control it as well. It destroyed her village and since she made it out alive she felt the need to help the others who were going to be attacked. Yet as she grows up and tries to save the people she ends up harboring a deep hatred against humans because they once respected witches and now they just laughed at her. Therefore she hates them yet feels as if she must at least try and save them if only to make herself feel better about not stopping the demon completely. you know, your question just made me think that I should probably put that in the description! Thanks!"
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About 'Demon Fire |Prologue|':
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 • Created by: :-) Kelsey Lynn Reed
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 • Keywords: Demon, Witch, Fire, Destruction
 • Categories: Demons, Imps, Devils, Beholders..., Fights, Duels, Battles, Lycanthrope, Were-folk, etc, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins, Wizards, Priests, Druids, Sorcerers...
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